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Unit3 Celebrations写作技巧点拨
事件描述
事件描述类作文是常见的作文类型，主要考查学生的语言功底和叙事能力。
事件描述类作文属于记叙文或者夹叙夹议文，描述的内容可包括节日庆典、环保活动、校园故事等。写事件描述类作文时要注意围绕该事件组织材料。所写作文中应包括人物(who)、时间(when)、地点(where)、事件(what)等。
1．首段：点明写作的目的，并简要介绍所描述事件的内容，通常用过渡句引出下文。
2．主体段：从描述活动的准备工作开始，也可以结合题目介绍活动背景，然后按时间顺序着重描写事件的精彩部分。
3．尾段：对活动进行总结，并适当抒发情感。
1．That day was awesome/wonderful.
2．It was...which we had been preparing for quite some time.
3．Early in the morning...After that...Then...
4．As soon as..., we started...
5．Finally/At last/Eventually...I felt...
6．I am looking forward to...
7．Everybody got excited when...
8．It is really an unforgettable experience.
9．What impressed me most is that..../I was deeply impressed by...
10．We enjoyed ourselves a lot during the activity./We had a lot of fun during the party.
满分作文特训
假如你是李华，上周日是你妈妈的生日，你和爸爸还有弟弟一起为妈妈庆祝了生日。请根据下面的提示，用英语把这件事描述一下。
1．上周日是妈妈的四十五岁生日；
2．家人都为她准备了生日礼物；
3．爸爸下厨做了好吃的饭菜；
4．大家一起祝妈妈生日快乐，感谢她为家里所做的一切。
注意：1.词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
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第一步：审题构思很关键
第二步：核心词汇想周全
1．haveamerryday 度过快乐的一天
2．haveatalksecretly 秘密地进行交谈
3．pocketmoney 零花钱
4．besurprisedat... 对……惊讶
5．comebackfromwork 下班回家
6．thanksb.forsth. 因某事而感谢某人
第三步：由词扩句雏形现
1．我的爸爸、弟弟和我秘密地进行了交谈。
My father, brother and I ．
2．我们讨论了怎样庆祝妈妈的生日。
We discussed ．
3．我们到家时，看到一张桌子已经摆好了。
When we got home, ．
4．桌子上有很多好吃的食物。
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5．我们都对她说：“生日快乐！”
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6．我们感谢妈妈为家里所做的一切。
We all thanked her for ．
第四步：句式升级造亮点
1．把第三步中的句1和句2用现在分词作伴随状语合并成一句
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2．把第三步中的句3和句4用with复合结构合并成一句
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3．把第三步中的句5和句6用现在分词短语作伴随状语合并成一句
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第五步：过渡衔接连成篇
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参考答案：
1．我的爸爸、弟弟和我秘密地进行了交谈。
My father, brother and I hadatalksecretly．
2．我们讨论了怎样庆祝妈妈的生日。
We discussed howtocelebratemymother'sbirthday．
3．我们到家时，看到一张桌子已经摆好了。
When we got home, wesawatablelaid．
4．桌子上有很多好吃的食物。
Thereweremanydeliciousfoodsonthetable.
5．我们都对她说：“生日快乐！”
Weallsaid“HappyBirthday！”toher.
6．我们感谢妈妈为家里所做的一切。
We all thanked her for whatshehaddoneforourfamily．
第四步：句式升级造亮点
1．把第三步中的句1和句2用现在分词作伴随状语合并成一句
My__father,__brother__and__I__had__a__talk__secretly,__discussing__how__to__celebrate__my__mother's__birthday.
2．把第三步中的句3和句4用with复合结构合并成一句
When__we__got__home,__we__saw__a__table__laid__with__many__delicious__foods__on__it．
3．把第三步中的句5和句6用现在分词短语作伴随状语合并成一句
We__all__said__“Happy__Birthday!__”__to__her,__thanking__her__for__what__she__had__done__for__our__family．
第五步：过渡衔接连成篇
One possible version：
We had a merry day last Sunday, for it was my mother's 45th birthday!
Several days before, my father, brother and I had a talk secretly, discussing how to celebrate my mother's birthday. On Sunday morning, my brother and I got up early and went to buy some flowers using our pocket money. When we got home, we saw a table laid with many delicious foods on it. My mother was so surprised at what she saw when she came back from work. We all said “Happy Birthday！” to her, thanking her for what she had done for our family.
I love my family and I will remember the happy day forever!
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